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There is a beautiful garden in my house which I'm going to describe now. Before you enter my house, you can see a small neat stone wall. This wall is not so tall, but pretty. When you enter my house, you can see a lot of trees and flowers, and(article)extensive lawn behind a stone wall. There are two camellias, two old sea-pine trees, roses, flower grass, a jujube tree and a persimmon tree. In every spring, all of the flowers are in full bloom. There is a forest of bamboos behind my house. A lot of birds, such as sparrows, doves, titmouse and magpies, are singing everyday behind my house; furthermore, I have a small pond in which fish like goldfish are swimming and frogs are jumpping around. There is a small stream in front of my house. A field of reeds in the stream is changed brown every fall, my feeling is come calmness when I see this field. I miss my garden, right now.

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my house, you can see a small neat stone wall. This wall is not so tall, but pretty. When you enter my house, you can see a lot of trees and flowers, and an extensive lawn behind a stone wall. There are two camellias, two old sea-pine trees, roses, flower grass, a jujube tree and a persimmon tree. In every spring, all of the flowers are in full bloom. There is a forest of bamboos behind my house. A lot of birds, such as sparrows, doves, titmouse and magpies, are singing everyday behind my house; furthermore, I have a small pond in which fish like goldfish are swimming and frogs are jumping around. There is a small stream in front of my house. A field of reeds in the stream is changed brown every fall. A calm feeling comes when I see this field. I miss my garden, right now.