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When I first came to America in december 2003, I went to many fantastic places; San Francisco, Los Angeles, Yosemite national park, Las Vegas, Atlanta and so on. All places where I went to remained in my memory, but one of the most fatastic places was San Francisco. So today, I'd like to introduce Golden Gate Bridge in San Francisco.

I went to Golden Gate Bridge in San Francisco with my family. It was the most beautiful scene I have never seen before. We had a tour guide who has lived in San Francisco for 15 years. He did the cicerone for us and told about Golden Gate Bridge. When we first saw(article) bridge, we were surprised that it was beautiful. It was(article) very long and big bridge I have never seen (what?)before. It looked like a bony red mountain. Many guls were flying near it. Many sightseers took a picture and walked near bridge. We took a tour bus and crossed bridge. (articleTour guide said when many cars cross bridge, sometimes it quakes fearfully. And then, we were surprised one more. It was unbelievable that such a big bridge can quake.

After that, we went aboard an white excursion steamer and sight-saw(we don't havwe a past form for this so you just have to say went sightseeing). There is the Alcatraz where came out movie is The Rock near bridge. The Alcatraz had been(article prison which no one escaped. (articleTour guide said many years ago one man tried to escape but no one knew if he succeeded or not. Everyone who knows it thinks he may died. Anyway, we took a picture in excursion steamer and went to(article buttom of(article bridge, then we past under a bridge. When we looked at it close at hand, it was really really big and long.
After finishing to go aboard a excursion steamer, there were many big, blue seals near the wharf. More surprise thing was they were on the rock near a restaurant, so people fed(article seals.

After(article tour, it gives to me a deep impression, so I never forget such many things. If you have a time, you are sure to go there.

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When I first came to America in December 2003, I went to many fantastic places: San Francisco, Los Angeles, Yosemite National Park, Las Vegas, Atlanta and so on. All places where I went remained in my memory, but one of the most fantastic places was San Francisco.

So today, I'd like to introduce The Golden Gate Bridge in San Francisco.

I went to Golden Gate Bridge in San Francisco with my family. It was the most beautiful scene I have ever seen before. We had a tour guide who has lived in San Francisco for 15 years. He gave us a guided tour and told about Golden Gate Bridge. When we first saw the bridge, we were surprised that it was beautiful. It was a very long and big. I have never seen it before. It looked like a bony red mountain. Many gulls were flying near it. Many sightseers took a picture and walked near bridge. We took a tour bus and crossed bridge. Our tour guide said when many cars cross a bridge, sometimes it quakes fearfully. And then, we were surprised once again. It was unbelievable that such a big bridge can quake.

After that, we went aboard a white excursion steamer and went sightseeing. The Alcatraz where the movie, The Rock, was filmed was near bridge. The Alcatraz had been a prison which no one escaped. A tour guide said many years ago one man tried to escape but no one knew if he succeeded or not. Everyone who knows it thinks he may have died. Anyway, we took a picture on excursion steamer and went under the bridge. When we looked at it close at hand, it was really really big and long. After finishing to go aboard an excursion steamer, there were many big, blue seals near the wharf. What was the most surprising thing was they were on the rock near a restaurant, so people fed the seals.

After our tour, it gave to me a deep impression, so I never forget such things. If you have time, you are sure to go there.

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