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"Yeo edo fireworks festival "

In my citiy has an interesting event, Yeo edo fireworks festival, this event happens at the beginning of summer once in every 2 years in Korea.

This event means universal peace, and the place is Yeo edo in Seoul, Korea that is surrounding the Han Kang River near my house. It's a beautiful place.

When we saw fireworks, we could make our wishes and peace all over the world.
Then if you go to the Yeo edo fireworks fastival, you are going to see so many couples. So you

had better go with your girl friend or boy friend. The fastival is a big event, so Other countries

bring fireworkers gather in Yeo edo place, for example China, Japan, Russia, and the other countries. They are firework contest with attendance of other countries in this event.

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My city has interesting event, Yeo edo fireworks festival that happens at the beginning of summer once in every 2 years in Korea.
This event means universal peace, and the place is Yeo edo in Seoul, Korea that is surrounding the Han Kang River near my house. It's a beautiful place.
When we saw fireworks, we could make our wishes and peace all over the world.Then if you go to the Yeo edo fireworks festival, you are going to see so many couples. So you had better go with your girl friend or boy friend. The festival is a big event, so other countries gather in Yeo edo place, for example China, Japan, Russia, and the other countries for(because there is) a fireworks contest with attendance of other countries in this event. (This is much better!)