Friday, May 20, 2005
Tsunami in Thailand (Pongpoth)
Pongpoth Pinitpreecha (Paul)
An interesting event that happened in your city
Title : Tsunami in Thailand
Tsunami in Thailand killed many people and become to the nightmare of Thais. In the morning lately of December 26,2005 , most people still slept and didn’t know before that it would happen. Suddenly many gigantic waves , called “Tsunami” , swashed into the coast of south-west Thailand . It killed approximately 8,000 persons , including foreign travelers. The major cause of the Tsunami in Thailand was from an earthquake in Indonesia (Sumatra Island) , furthermore , Thailand didn’t have a warning system. However , the government hurried to find out the preventing and correcting measures and restored many places which were damaged from it. Moreover , everyone felt sympathetic and contributed something for someone who suffered from this effect.
Eventhough it passed 5 months ago , specialists have still discuss about the ways to help Tsunami victims. The best way is
Finally , we all hope this event will not happen in Thailand and other places in the world because none of us want to see like the catastrophe. (Good use of transition words.)
Second Draft
Tsunami in Thailand killed many people and became to the nightmare of Thais. In the late morning of December 26,2005 , most people still slept and didn’t know before that it would happen. Suddenly many gigantic waves , called “Tsunami” , swashed into the coast of south-west Thailand . It killed approximately 8,000 persons , including foreign travelers. The major cause of the Tsunami in Thailand was from an earthquake in Indonesia (Sumatra Island). Furthermore , Thailand didn’t have a warning system. However , the government hurried to find out the preventing and correcting measures and restored many places which were damaged from it. Moreover , everyone felt sympathetic and contributed something for someone who suffered from this effect.
Even though it passed 5 months ago, specialists have still discussed about the ways to help Tsunami victims. Some agreed that the best way should make people realize what Tsunami is by pressing and learnt about the natural system. For example(comma) if human beings know to use resource(plural) carefully, the nature will not do some disaster with them. Others agreed that people should observe the phenomena that have something wrong such as changing of behavior of animals and the weather.
Finally , we all hope this event will not happen in Thailand and other places in the world because none of us want to see another catastrophe.
An interesting event that happened in your city
Title : Tsunami in Thailand
Tsunami in Thailand killed many people and become to the nightmare of Thais. In the morning lately of December 26,2005 , most people still slept and didn’t know before that it would happen. Suddenly many gigantic waves , called “Tsunami” , swashed into the coast of south-west Thailand . It killed approximately 8,000 persons , including foreign travelers. The major cause of the Tsunami in Thailand was from an earthquake in Indonesia (Sumatra Island) , furthermore , Thailand didn’t have a warning system. However , the government hurried to find out the preventing and correcting measures and restored many places which were damaged from it. Moreover , everyone felt sympathetic and contributed something for someone who suffered from this effect.
Eventhough it passed 5 months ago , specialists have still discuss about the ways to help Tsunami victims. The best way is
Finally , we all hope this event will not happen in Thailand and other places in the world because none of us want to see like the catastrophe. (Good use of transition words.)
Second Draft
Tsunami in Thailand killed many people and became to the nightmare of Thais. In the late morning of December 26,2005 , most people still slept and didn’t know before that it would happen. Suddenly many gigantic waves , called “Tsunami” , swashed into the coast of south-west Thailand . It killed approximately 8,000 persons , including foreign travelers. The major cause of the Tsunami in Thailand was from an earthquake in Indonesia (Sumatra Island). Furthermore , Thailand didn’t have a warning system. However , the government hurried to find out the preventing and correcting measures and restored many places which were damaged from it. Moreover , everyone felt sympathetic and contributed something for someone who suffered from this effect.
Even though it passed 5 months ago, specialists have still discussed about the ways to help Tsunami victims. Some agreed that the best way should make people realize what Tsunami is by pressing and learnt about the natural system. For example(comma) if human beings know to use resource(plural) carefully, the nature will not do some disaster with them. Others agreed that people should observe the phenomena that have something wrong such as changing of behavior of animals and the weather.
Finally , we all hope this event will not happen in Thailand and other places in the world because none of us want to see another catastrophe.
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