Friday, May 20, 2005
Red devils' Power in the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup.
For a hundred years, soccer has been (need article) famous sports, so soccer game which called(passive voice)the World Cup is held every four years. Finally( I don't think you want to say finally so soon), The World Cup is out of the most famous sports event in the world. And then, the World Cup had been held in Korea and Japan in 2002.
My country had advanced to the World Cup six times; however, unfortunately, they never had won the game. So, many Korean people had been longing for a victory in the World Cup. And then, dreams came true. My country won the game from the preliminary league for the first time, and the Korean soccer team continuously won the game. So, most Korean people were wildly excited.
Whenever they won the game, people rushed out into the streets in every city. They wore red shirts because the Korean soccer team's uniform it's red. They were supporters who were named "Red Devils" for the Korean team. So, the streets were covered with red which seemed like a wave.
We called Red Devils, " The 12th of a fighter", because their supports raised the morale of the Korean soccer team, so they could win the game in the World Cup.
At last, Korea advanced to the semifinals(here you need a comma--see page 281 in grammar book) which had never happened before. So, the Korean team's coach, Hidink, became a national hero.
Although they lost in the semifinals, they played well. So, until now, it remains in our mind. In the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup, Red-Devils let the world know how powerful they were.
Second draft
For a hundred years, soccer has been a famous sport, so soccer game which was called the World Cup is held every four years. So, The World Cup is one of the most famous sports event in the world. And then,(This isn't useful here.) the World Cup had been(simple past tense is better here.) held in Korea and Japan in 2002.
My country had advanced to the World Cup six times; however, unfortunately, they never had won the game. So, many Korean people had been longing for a victory in the World Cup. And then, dreams came true. My country won the game from the preliminary league for the first time, and the Korean soccer team continuously won the game. So, most Korean people were wildly excited.
Whenever they won the game, people rushed out into the streets in every city. They wore red shirts because the Korean soccer team's uniform it was red. They were supporters who were named "Red Devils" for the Korean team. So, the streets were covered with red which seemed like a wave. We called Red Devils, " The 12th of a fighter", because their supports raised the morale of the Korean soccer team, so they could win the game in the World Cup.
At last, Korea advanced to the semifinals, which had never happened before. So, the Korean team's coach, Hidink, became a national hero. Although they lost in the semifinals, they played well. So, until now, it remains in our mind. In the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup, Red-Devils let the world know how powerful they were.
My country had advanced to the World Cup six times; however, unfortunately, they never had won the game. So, many Korean people had been longing for a victory in the World Cup. And then, dreams came true. My country won the game from the preliminary league for the first time, and the Korean soccer team continuously won the game. So, most Korean people were wildly excited.
Whenever they won the game, people rushed out into the streets in every city. They wore red shirts because the Korean soccer team's uniform it's red. They were supporters who were named "Red Devils" for the Korean team. So, the streets were covered with red which seemed like a wave.
We called Red Devils, " The 12th of a fighter", because their supports raised the morale of the Korean soccer team, so they could win the game in the World Cup.
At last, Korea advanced to the semifinals(here you need a comma--see page 281 in grammar book) which had never happened before. So, the Korean team's coach, Hidink, became a national hero.
Although they lost in the semifinals, they played well. So, until now, it remains in our mind. In the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup, Red-Devils let the world know how powerful they were.
Second draft
For a hundred years, soccer has been a famous sport, so soccer game which was called the World Cup is held every four years. So, The World Cup is one of the most famous sports event in the world. And then,(This isn't useful here.) the World Cup had been(simple past tense is better here.) held in Korea and Japan in 2002.
My country had advanced to the World Cup six times; however, unfortunately, they never had won the game. So, many Korean people had been longing for a victory in the World Cup. And then, dreams came true. My country won the game from the preliminary league for the first time, and the Korean soccer team continuously won the game. So, most Korean people were wildly excited.
Whenever they won the game, people rushed out into the streets in every city. They wore red shirts because the Korean soccer team's uniform it was red. They were supporters who were named "Red Devils" for the Korean team. So, the streets were covered with red which seemed like a wave. We called Red Devils, " The 12th of a fighter", because their supports raised the morale of the Korean soccer team, so they could win the game in the World Cup.
At last, Korea advanced to the semifinals, which had never happened before. So, the Korean team's coach, Hidink, became a national hero. Although they lost in the semifinals, they played well. So, until now, it remains in our mind. In the 2002 Korea-Japan World Cup, Red-Devils let the world know how powerful they were.
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