Wednesday, May 25, 2005
Crazy About The Japanese Cartoon Books
Janthima Srisombat(O)
An interesting story from your childhood
Title: Crazy about The Japanese Cartoon Books
When I was 14 years old, I loved reading cartoon books. The special cartoon book for me was romantic Japanese cartoon books. Not only the story of Japanese books was interesting, but the hand-sketch cartoon was amazing also. That is the special character of Japanese cartoon books. In my free time, I was spent in reading these cartoon books so it made me had not any time to read and reviewed other books that I studied at the school. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books. It was two-third (need an s--two-thirds) of (possessive adj) pocket money. I have been buying Japanese cartoon books every day for six months. The more I bought, the more I had. I was worried about where I should hide them from my mother. I decided to hide all my Japanese cartoon books at the corner of my bedroom. I had not enough prudent. One day she came in my bedroom, then she found many Japanese cartoon books. She knew immediately what the cause of my low grade point average was. She punished and scolded me. She stopped giving me pocket money for two months. It made me appreciate in value of money. And that was the first time I began managing my time and money in the right way by myself. ( This is a good narrative.)
1. I love romantic Japanese cartoon books.
2. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books.
3. My mother punished and scolded me.
4. I didn’t have any time to read and review book that I studied at the school
Second Draft
When I was 14 years old, I loved reading cartoon books. The special cartoon book for me was romantic Japanese cartoon books. Not only the story of Japanese books was interesting, but the hand-sketch cartoon was amazing also. That is the special character of Japanese cartoon books.
(Try substituting some pronouns so that you don't need to repeat the same nouns so many times.)
In my free time, I spent most time for reading these cartoon books(comma) so I did not have any time to read and review other books that I studied at school. I enjoyed reading the Japanese cartoon books after I have eaten(use simple past tense here) in the evening. When I finished my cartoon books, I slept happily.
I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books. It was two-thirds of my pocket money. I had been buying Japanese cartoon books every day for six months. The more I bought, the more I had. I was worried about where I should hide them from my mother. I decided to hide all my Japanese cartoon books at the corner of my bedroom. I was not prudent enough.
One day she came in my bedroom, then she found many Japanese cartoon books. She knew immediately what the cause of my low grade point average was. She punished and scolded me. She stopped giving me pocket money for two months. It made me appreciate the value of money. And that was the first time I began managing my time and money in the right way by myself.
1. I love romantic Japanese cartoon books.
2. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books.
3. My mother punished and scolded me.
4. I didn’t have any time to read and review book that I studied at the school
An interesting story from your childhood
Title: Crazy about The Japanese Cartoon Books
When I was 14 years old, I loved reading cartoon books. The special cartoon book for me was romantic Japanese cartoon books. Not only the story of Japanese books was interesting, but the hand-sketch cartoon was amazing also. That is the special character of Japanese cartoon books. In my free time, I was spent in reading these cartoon books so it made me had not any time to read and reviewed other books that I studied at the school. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books. It was two-third (need an s--two-thirds) of (possessive adj) pocket money. I have been buying Japanese cartoon books every day for six months. The more I bought, the more I had. I was worried about where I should hide them from my mother. I decided to hide all my Japanese cartoon books at the corner of my bedroom. I had not enough prudent. One day she came in my bedroom, then she found many Japanese cartoon books. She knew immediately what the cause of my low grade point average was. She punished and scolded me. She stopped giving me pocket money for two months. It made me appreciate in value of money. And that was the first time I began managing my time and money in the right way by myself. ( This is a good narrative.)
1. I love romantic Japanese cartoon books.
2. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books.
3. My mother punished and scolded me.
4. I didn’t have any time to read and review book that I studied at the school
Second Draft
When I was 14 years old, I loved reading cartoon books. The special cartoon book for me was romantic Japanese cartoon books. Not only the story of Japanese books was interesting, but the hand-sketch cartoon was amazing also. That is the special character of Japanese cartoon books.
(Try substituting some pronouns so that you don't need to repeat the same nouns so many times.)
In my free time, I spent most time for reading these cartoon books(comma) so I did not have any time to read and review other books that I studied at school. I enjoyed reading the Japanese cartoon books after I have eaten(use simple past tense here) in the evening. When I finished my cartoon books, I slept happily.
I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books. It was two-thirds of my pocket money. I had been buying Japanese cartoon books every day for six months. The more I bought, the more I had. I was worried about where I should hide them from my mother. I decided to hide all my Japanese cartoon books at the corner of my bedroom. I was not prudent enough.
One day she came in my bedroom, then she found many Japanese cartoon books. She knew immediately what the cause of my low grade point average was. She punished and scolded me. She stopped giving me pocket money for two months. It made me appreciate the value of money. And that was the first time I began managing my time and money in the right way by myself.
1. I love romantic Japanese cartoon books.
2. I spent a lot of money for Japanese cartoon books.
3. My mother punished and scolded me.
4. I didn’t have any time to read and review book that I studied at the school
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